Hi @scott-kehoe, I’m having a hard time copy and pasting the link you provided. When I paste it, it shows up as unavailable.

Could you please go to your LinkedIn profile once more and copy the URL exactly and paste it in here again?

Hi there, @scott-kehoe! I got your email and was able to successfully find your LinkedIn page! Below are my comments for revision:

Your profile photo looks fantastic! Very professional and engaging.

You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. Please also email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is and she will create something custom for you.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have written is okay but it needs to be a bit more specific from the moment you read it.

Based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

Here is one example:

Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!

About Section:

Scott, this is the “meat and potatoes” of your page. What you have written is in 3rd person and I’d like you to speak directly to your perfect client in either 1st or 2nd person.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Your paragraphs are VERY hard to read and very chunky. I want you to get right to the point. WHAT do you do, WHO do you work with, HOW do you help your client, and WHY should they work with you?

Pro tip: go to Kent’s Linkedin profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those chunky paragraphs.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

Call to action at the end of your message:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please let me know after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂