Hi there, @colette-trail! Welcome to the program – happy to provide you with feedback, below:

Your profile photo is lovely but it’s looking a little dark. Send it through email to Lindsey, our graphic designer, and have her brighten the photo and add a white background for you. This will really help make your page look more professional.

You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. The image is cute but it doesn’t tell people what you do or how you help your clients. Please also email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is in and she will create something custom for you! If you have a logo or phone number, you can send that to her as well.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

Looks super!!

About Section:

Your first sentence is essentially what you have written in the Headline. I want you to instead use this space as a sales letter.

I like how you’re telling your clients how you will help them but I want you to replace “I” with “you” and really keep the focus on them.

Example:

“I pride myself on Traditional Real Estate practices with todays technology.”

To:

When you work with me, you will have access to enhanced technology in order to get your home in front of QUALIFIED buyers! No more wasting time!

Also, i’d love for the paragraph to be broken up into smaller chunks because right now it’s one chunky section.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Also, you HAVE some good content – it just needs to be better organized 🙂

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂