Hi there, @peter-macintyre! Welcome to the program, it’s great to have you! Below are my comments and feedback on your profile:

Wonderful profile photo! Zoom in just a pink more so we can see your face clearly.

You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. Please also email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is in and she will create something custom for you. Please send her any logos or information you want to be added. Right now, your profile photo is blocking the text on your banner image.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have written is “Associate Broker/Realtor MacIntyre & Cowen ReMax Real Estate Professionals”  BUT based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

Here is one example:

Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!

About Section:

I like how you’re starting off your sales letter talking about your experience but please speak in the first person.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Also, you HAVE some good content, it just needs to be better organized 🙂

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

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We want you to talk to your potential clients in your sales letter by talking less about yourself in resume format and more about HOW you will help them, WHO you work with, and WHY they should work with you.

Call to action (you need one at the end of your sales letter):

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂