Hi @eric-jurmo! It’s wonderful having you here in the program with us! Below are my comments on your profile:

Profile Photo: I’d like you to send it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and please have her add a white background for you. This will really help your image look more updated.

Banner image: you need on (the blue image behind your profile photo) please also tell Lindsey your field of work and she will create something custom for you!

Here is her email –> Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline: I really like what you have written – your first question is a little bit too wordy for one sentence. I’d consider shortening it down a bit if possible.

About section: your message immediately grabbed my attention but please lowercase the first letter of words that do not need to be capitalized.

I really like what your sales letter looks like – you provided a lot of excellent information! I would challenge you to replace “I” with “you” to strengthen your message.

Here’s an example:

I am Disciplined, Patient, and Conservative.

TO:

When clients like you work with me, you can rest assured knowing that I am disciplined in my work, patient with your needs, and conservative with _________.

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Everything else looks great!

Hi there, @eric-jurmo! Absolutely FAN-tastic job implementing my feedback! Your content kept me hooked the entire way through your sales letter!

Excellent! You are good to move forward in the program!