Hi there, @laurie-sutton! Beautiful profile photo, banner image, AND headline! I’m very happy with those improvements.

After you say this sentence:

I can get your home SOLD in a competitive market AND successfully negotiate the purchase of a NEW HOME by being creative with our approach.

I’d like you to maybe share one way that you do that, for example, you could say:

With my unique approach and marketing tools, I am able to showcase your home to over 700,000 potential clients through the online marketing techniques I use to get your home sold in the quickest time.

^ that was a bit of a rough example, but I hope you see the value of the example.

There are too many caps words making it hard to read your message, remove the majority of them.

I love your call to action and I want it to be the very last thing your readers read and engage with.

So, put your testimonials and THEN your call to action at the end.

FANTASTIC job – I loved hearing your personality shine through!

This looks great, @laurie-sutton! Nice work revising! Break up the 2nd chunky paragraph.

Look how Kent’s paragraphs are easy to consume… that’s what I want yours to reflect.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Other than that, fantastic job and you’re good to move on!