Hey there, @paul-schiliro! Nice job taking action on your profile! Below are my comments:

Great profile photo! I’d love for you to send it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background to it. This will really help it look updated and less dark.

You need a background banner photo. When you email Lindsey, have her also create a banner image for you. Just tell her about your field of business, any logos or text you want, and she’ll create it for you! Lindsey@coredm.com 

Headline:

Your headline is good but it’s a bit too focused on you and less on them. How about you fill in this template as I find it will really help you find the pain points of your perfect clients!

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

About Section:

For some reason, i’m not seeing your About section. If you have something written, it could be the privacy settings you have. If not, please do the following to start writing your sales letter in your LinkedIn profile:

• go to your profile
• click on “add section” under the headline
• click on about and write in the summary section

Please let me know if you need help with anything else and i’d love to assist 🙂

Hi @paul-schiliro, for your headline, I’d like it to be a little bit more concise with fewer capitals.

I think what would be more powerful is fewer credentials and more pain points – what’s something that your perfect client is struggling with? Is it finding QUALIFIED buyers? Seeing properties that the public doesn’t see?

Think of those and refill the template 😉

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When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized. Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program!

This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂