Hi there, @tama-murphy! It was so wonderful speaking with you this morning – thank you for submitting your profile for review. Blow are my comments for revision:

GOOD profile photo – could you zoom in a bit more so we can see your face clearly? Ideally, if you had a straight on photo and not one from a high angle, that would be better 🙂

You also need a background banner image. Please email Lindsey, our graphic designer, tell her your field of work and she will create something better for you.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

What you currently have written is “Fierce, Focused and Fun Realtor serving CT!” and based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

Example you can use:

Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!

About Section:

Tama, right now your About section is looking like a resume and based on the teachings of a lesson, you want to write a sales letter that tells people WHAT you do, WHO you work with, and HOW you can help them.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is a Realtor’s profile as an example:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/ 

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!

• This reply was modified 3 years, 3 months ago by n d.

Hi @tama-murphy, could you tell Lindsey that the edit she made on the profile photo won’t transfer? I wonder if the image is too large.

I revised your headline to make it stand out a pinch more:

Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home To QUALIFIED Buyers?☆EXPERT Real Estate Agent helping clients in CT and NY☆☞Message Me!

Your profile looks fantastic!! Good work 🙂