wow I loved it….I am so new at all this , this diffidently attract reads.  Its quick and to the point

Hi there, @marshall-embry! Welcome to the program – happy to provide you with feedback, below:

GREAT profile photo!

I don’t like your background image very much.

Please email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and tell her your field of business and she will create something custom for you.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

GOOD headline! Based on the teachings of the lesson, we find that it’s best to focus on either buyers OR sellers. Not both. This helps strengthen your message. Of course, you can briefly detail it in your about section but for your headline, it helps to focus on the one that excites you the most.

For example:

Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Added Stress☆Licensed Texas REALTOR at Magnolia Realty Owned By Chip and Joanna Gaines☆ ☞Message Me!

About Section:

This is a good start!! Again, it would be good to focus on a buyer or seller and then later in the middle of your About section you can also say “I work with _____ as well.”

Marshall, you have some good content but mainly it’s reviews and this is meant to be a powerful sales letter of what you do, who you work with, and why/how you can help them.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

You are so close 🙂 just need some more content.

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Testimonials:

Remove “Marshall is amazing” from the 2nd one from Mary because they both start off saying that. Get right to the point of the testimonial. No longer than 3 sentences.

Call to action looks GREAT!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂

Hey there, @marshall-embry! Nice work taking action!

Did you ever email Lindsey, our graphic designer, in regards to your banner image?? If not, please do so. I want it to look professional.

Tell her your field of business and she will create something custom for you.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you have written is good but it looks a bit off – I revamped It below. Just copy and paste into the headline section.

Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home To Qualified Buyers? ☆Licensed Texas REALTOR® at Magnolia Realty Owned By Chip and Joanna Gaines☆ ☞Message Me!

About Section:

LOOKS GREAT!!

Nice work Marshall 🙂