Hi, Candace;

I see some typos that need fixed to make it look more professional. I copied what you have in the information and suggest changes below…

Looking for a NEW Home? Are you an entrepreneur needing more space?? Call “Can Do Candy” and let the adventure begin.

Whether you are just starting out or seeking the perfect retirement or semi –retirement opportunity, don’t settle for the ordinary. Choose to live where opportunity blooms.

I have lived and worked in Eastern Oregon for 60 years, and have been a professional realtor for 21 years. With the A-team of professionals that I work with, your real estate transaction is as stress-free as I can make it.

Sherri Chambers, satisfied customer: “We bought and sold several rentals and personal homes through Candy. I highly recommend her.”

Lesley McMilian, satisfied customer: “I would highly recommend Candy. If she doesn’t have the answer, she will find the solution.”

Brian Anders: “Candy Says, ‘There are times that I think I am doing things on Principal, mainly I just do what is right.’ But that’s a principal too.”

Hi @candace-bowman, you got some good tips above from a fellow member 🙂 below is more feedback I’d like you to implement.

Good profile photo. Please click on the photo and adjust so your face is centered and not on the far left side.

You also need a banner image (the blue background).

I’d also like you to email Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have written is “Stop Searching Start Living” and we really want to take advantage of this section of your profile and have it POP!

Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

About Section:

I like the feedback you were given above.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Try to ask 3 short and sweet but POWERFUL pain point questions.

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

You want to tell them WHAT you do, WHO you work with, and HOW you can help them. Keep the focus completely on them.

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!

Hi @candace-bowman, You don’t have many connections, and I could not message you without using an inMail on LINKEDIN.

Please send me a LINKEDIN invite to bencarpenetti@me.com; it will help you to connect with people.

Please check out the replies above, @candace-bowman 🙂