Hi @carmina-pinto-gelberg,

Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer and have her add a white background for you??

You need a banner image! I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have is “Professional Realtor at eXp Realty, LLC” and you really want something that POPS and is attention-grabbing. This needs some work. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

About:

You started out strong but then a lot of the focus went to you and your work and we want to make sure that in your sales letter, the focus is fully on them. There is also too much education. I’d like you to check out this profile example of what a realtor in the program wrote:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/

You have some good points, but there needs to also be some paragraph breaks – right now, you have one BIG paragraph.

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!

I agree with what Negeen said.

Background for sure and the headline needs an interesting “statement” that makes me want to read more.

Then the about me past is virtually unreadable as written. At least as a consumer, I don’t think I’d read it. great information or not.

Hopefully this is helpful,

Steve

about me “part”……not past. Sorry.