I seemed to be confused a little.  I have been in since Wednesday.  I thought I was working on Module 1: Mindset and Momentum.  I wrote the following:

FROM VIDEO NUMBER 3

BENEFIT MARKETING

WRITTEN FOR CRITIQUE FROM COACHES AT HECP

HEADLINE

WOULD YOU LIKE TO INCREASE YOUR INCOME BY 2X, 3X, 5X, OR EVEN 10X?

WOULD YOU LIKE TO LEARN HOW TO LIVE DEBT FREE, WHILE BUILDING A GIANT NESTEGG?

WOULD YOU LIKE ALL THE TIME YOU NEED TO SPEND WITH YOUR LOVED ONES?

WOULD YOU LIKE THE FREEDOM TO RETIRE COMFORTABLY IN 5, 10, OR 15 YEARS FROM NOW?

WOULD YOU LIKE THE ABILITY TO GIVE FREELY TO THOSE IN NEED?

ARE YOU ABLE TO DO THIS TODAY?

WHAT WOULD ALL OF THE ABOVE BE WORTH TO YOU?

            IF YOU ARE SERIOUS ABOUT THIS KIND OF CHANGE?  IF YOU BELIEVE IN YOU ENOUGH TO INVEST IN YOURSELF?  HERE IS YOUR CALL TO ACTION:  FILL OUT THE BRIEF QUESTIONNAIRE AND GRAB ONE OF THE TIME SLOTS IN MY SCHEDULE: 

WARNING: ONLY VERY SERIOUS INDIVIDULAS NEED APPLY.

Can someone critique this and let me know if I am in the wrong place.  If so, where am I supposed to be?  Please advise