Hi @sharyn-winick, below are my comments for revision I’d like you to make.

Your current profile photo is really dark and hard to see. Do you have a better photo that is of high quality? If you email it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, ask her to brighten the photo and add a white background for you. Once she sends the photo back, please zoom in more so we can see your face clearly.

I don’t like your background photo very much because the house is cut off. I’d also like you to email Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have written is “Sales Associate at EXIT King Realty” and we want you to write something better that is more attention grabbing!!

HOW ABOUT THIS:

Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Florida☆☞ Message Me!

About section:

VERY IMPORTANT* this is not a resume so you don’t want to talk about yourself. Based on the lesson, there needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.

Please refer to this realtor profile from another realtor in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

Look how they detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/

Please go back through the lesson – you need a lot more content!!

You need to tell them:

what you do, how you help them, who you work with, why they should work with you
CALL TO ACTION – you need a better one:

If you’re READY for _______ message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!