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Hi @larry-clarke, GREAT profile photo, and background banner image!!
If you ever need any graphic design help in the future within the program, here is our graphic designers contact below:
Headline (words under name):
I do like your headline BUT based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
About Section:
You have good content but I do want to note that while reading your About section, it’s one huge paragraph – make sure to break up your paragraphs. Also, it’s very important to focus on only buyers or sellers in your sales letter. Of course, you can mention you do both, but for the sake of your sales letter, simply put the focus on one.
When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.
Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized!
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Call to action at the end:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!
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Hi @larry-clarke, my review is below:
Great profile photo, headline, and banner image!
Your About section is good but when you’re adding bullet points, it takes away from the ‘sales letter’ aspect.
I revised below:
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What I Do In A Few Words:
I SAFEGUARD senior homeowners during the home sale process and make sure they are fully taken care of!
Essentially…
When senior homeowners work with me, they can rest assured knowing that will my extensive knowledge and experience, I can make sure the entire home selling process is smooth sailing.
When you work with me, I make sure to take care of multiple contracts offers on the house, renting back the home after closing, home health care, bridge loans, downsizing, garage sales/estate sales, adult Children, preserving a legacy, and SO MUCH MORE!
What else?
I MINIMIZE all stress during the entire process.
Yep! You read that right!
WHAT DID I DO? I eliminated the seemingly insurmountable obstacles. I partnered with senior resource professionals to get the job done with MINIMAL stress to the SENIOR HOMEOWNERS or their children.
Who Benefits From My Work? Adult Children, Aging Parent(s), Aging Senior Homeowners.
Want an example?
Jim (92 years old) who is a WWII vet and retired cardiac surgeon (who also suffers from dementia) and Audrey (87 years old) a retired physician, needed someone reliable to work with. With my expert help, they were able to remove just the items they needed for relocation to Wisconsin near their daughter’s home.
I TOOK CARE OF THE REST- cleaning, hauling, painting, landscaping, repair, and of course SELLING the 4000+ s.f. family home for $660,000.WHO FREQUENTLY RECOMMEND MY SERVICES?
Case Managers, Community Sales Directors, Geriatric Nurse Specialist, Adult Children, Chronic Care Coordinators, Home Care Representatives, Senior Care Specialists, Social Workers, and Senior Community Outreach Representatives.If you’re READY to move forward… message me HERE on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
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You can change anything you like but I wanted to revise this for you!
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