3 years, 8 months ago-
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I am so happy to get past this!! I did it!! Please check it out and let me know because I would love this to be at its optimum efficiency. The only thing of great importance that I could not find was under privacy the Viewers of the profile also view – I couldn’t turn that off because I could not find it.
Onward. Critique away!!!
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Hi @diane-moss! Welcome to the program and awesome job taking action on your profile! My feedback is below:
Profile Photo: Good photo, but it looks a little grainy and of lower quality. Do you have the same picture in high quality?? If so, send it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background. Zoom out a pinch so your head isn’t cut off.
I like your background photo but the words are cut off. Have Lindsey fix that for you as well.
Here is her email: Lindsey@coredm.com
Headline:
What you have is on the right path but it’s a little loud and making it more difficult to read. ALSO – please only focus on buyers or sellers for your sales letter. How about this:
Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!
Diane, if you want to make that pretty above with your emojis, feel free to!
Summary:
Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.
Take out “GREETINGS!!!” “I’M A JUNKIE”
How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.
Right now, there’s too much emphasis on YOU and not enough on THEM.
What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the example I provided and look at the format which you can COPY)
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Realtor profile example:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/
You want to provide information that is:
Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you. It’s nice to educate them but not throughout the entire profile.
Call To Action:
You need one after your testimonials (which should be 1-3 sentences).
If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂
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Oh my. Thanks for the help. Here’s what I have now. Let me know how much more to tweak it. I don’t mind criticism especially when it is so beneficial.
WHAT I DO IN 14 WORDS OR LESS
Most agents simply list a home. I market them with OPTIMUM exposure.
Essentially…
Your home UNDER CONTRACT within 18 days average. Sellers moving on with the money in hands within 37 days!
I MAXIMIZE every opportunity to bring QUALIFIED BUYERS by helping you stage your home, getting professional QUALITY photos and optimizing the best marketing strategy for your home.
You can expect the BEST possible PRICE because of my marketing efforts via a diverse array of PERMIER consumer and real estate WEBSITES along with print marketing and mailouts. I use my expertise to understand the unique selling points of your home and neighborhood to get your house sold QUICKLY with the least amount of inconvenience to you!
IF NEEDED, you can expect me to discuss with you the necessary home repairs and improvements that will maximize your asking price.
From listing to closing I WORK CLOSELY with YOU throughout the process guiding you along the way AND keeping you informed. Also keeping in touch with the cross-sale agent and the buyer’s lender to know how the process is progressing which helps ELIMINATE the STRESS of the buyers not being able to close.
A FEW GOOD WORDS
Diane earned our trust and respect when we first moved to Houston 4 years ago. Due to this, we knew that she would be the right choice when selling our house when we were ready to leave Houston. We were right and she did not let us down. C. Murphy, Cypress
Diane is definitely the best Realtor I have ever had the pleasure of working with and have utilized her services with both listing and selling my properties many times before and continue to do so in the future! MICHAEL BADAL – INVESTOR
READY TO GET MOVING? READY TO MAKE THIS HAPPEN? LET’S TALK!! Message me here on LINKEDIN to see if we are a good fit.
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@diane-moss, this looks absolutely FANTASTIC!!!! (yay!)
Great work taking my feedback and applying it 🙂
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Nageen,
Thank YOU!! You are teaching an old dog new ways!! I sincerely appreciate you sending the real estate example. I was stymied. Couldn’t think of how to do it. Been in the business for 33 years. I need to know this!! And do things differently.
I’ve added it to my LINKEDIN Profile.
I’ve contacted Lindsay with the pictures etc.
Moving on to the next module!!
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You are doing amazing and super proud of you, @diane-moss!
Please let me know if you need anything else in the meantime 🙂
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