Hi @barbara-walton! Welcome to the program – I’d be happy to provide you with feedback! Below are my comments:

Your current profile photo is really dark and hard to see. Do you have a better photo that is of high quality? If you email it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, ask her to brighten the photo and add a white background for you. Also, try to have a photo of you straight on and not at an angle. Part of your head is also being cut off.

I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d also like you to email Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

Good headline!! I’d also recommend filling out this template to really make it POP!

Want_______ WITHOUT _______?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _______☆☞ Message Me!

About section:

I really like what you’ve written, but when it gets to the Team part, there’s a lot of educating happening and not enough focus on your sales letter.

You HAVE the information, you just need to focus your message more on: WHO you work with, HOW you can help, and WHY they should work with you.

Pro Tip: if you use Kent Littlejohn’s profile outline (we teach it in the program) I believe that will truly transform your message!!

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

CALL TO ACTION – try not to put a call to action in the middle of your message, and just leave It for the end.

If you’re READY for _______ message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!

Awesome work!