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Would love for feedback on my newly Updated Linkin Profile. https://www.linkedin.com/in/hillsfamilyinsurance/
Thank,
Matt Hills
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Hey @matthew-hills! Nice job taking action on your profile! Below are my comments for revision:
Your current profile photo is really good BUT I’d like you to add a white background to make it look professional.
If you email it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, ask her to add a white background for you.
I don’t like your background photo very much. We can make it look even more professional. I’d also like you to email Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!
Headline:
Your headline is on the right page!! Let’s really make it pop. Try filling out this template by thinking of your perfect clients pain points.
Want _______ WITHOUT ________?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients Find Peace of Mind☆☞ Message Me!
About section:
I love the story you are setting with the introduction to your sales letter! But you are using commas like “,,,” instead of “…”. Also – you really need to make your message more clear with how you write it. For example:
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Who do you call if you get in an accident??
911? Yes.
But who are you going to call after to help you ________.
That’s where I come in.
Essentially.
[SAY WHAT YOU DO AND WHO YOU HELP].
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Matt, you have ALL the awesome content, you just need to organize your points!
PRO TIP: go to Kent’s profile, copy his outline, and just plug in your content into his outline (it’s what we teach in the program).
This is not only going to make your points POP – it’s going to show that you are leading them effortlessly through your sales letter.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Call to action looks great!!!
TAKE OUT: I apologies for my answering service up front, it is better than an 800 number or being on hold for days, but I have found that this is the best way to be of immediate service to you. I look forward to helping you and your family. Contact me today.
^ BE ALPHA AND DONT APOLOGIZE 🙂
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Will, when you’re filling out the template, be sure to mention:
- who you work with
- HOW you help your clients
- why they should work with you
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@matthew-hills, did you email Lindsey about your profile image and banner image?? If not, please do so.
Your headline still needs work. Your phone number does not belong in the headline. How about this:
Want FULL Protection For Your Family In Case of An Accident?☆EXPERT Advisor Helping Clients Find Peace of Mind☆☞ Message Me!
Matthew, your about section looks AWESOME! Good work.
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I did email my stuff to Lindsey but have not heard anything. I will work on the headline. Thanks for the feed back… I would like to tape my infomercial today, but have not seen any feedback on the text. Is it out there somewhere? Quess I am not getting the hang of the support forum yet.
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