Hi @laurent-metzler! Good job taking massive imperfect action 🙂 few things…

Did you see my feedback about the blurry profile photo and having a banner image??

Please email Lindsey about both if you haven’t already. Lindsey@coredm.com

Your headline is on the right path but it’s very wordy! How about using something like this instead:

Worried Your RETIREMENT Dream Won’t Be A Reality? STOP ☆ Worrying – Let’s Put A High-Profit Plan In Place! ☆☞ MSG Me!

ALSO — your profile section is very complex and you have to bring it down to a 5th grade reading level.

About Section FULL REVISION (JUST COPY AND PASTE):

Are you TIRED of continually losing massive amounts of money in the stock market?
Tired of paying TOO much in income taxes?
Are you afraid of living too long and running out of money?
If this sounds like you, I know EXACTLY how to help you!

Essentially…

I work EXCLUSIVELY with high net worth individuals and business owners like you who are seeking a comprehensive plan to: minimize taxes, maximize the return on their investments, and minimize professional fees and expenses!

What’s better?

Our wealth management strategies are designed to help you to seek TOP stock market returns while avoiding bailout points that are triggered during major market declines. This will help YOU get minor losses in the case of a catastrophic market loss (like the ’08-’09 meltdown).

WHO I WORK WITH:
If you are a business owner anticipating selling your business, or an individual with substantial retirement plan accumulations, I will help you keep more of your hard-earned money. I will help develop an effective, long-term tax exit strategy that will MINIMIZE federal and state income taxes, now and in the future.

Why Work With Me?

After spending over 40 years in the wealth management and estate planning business, I have learned one thing, the tax regulations and the investment landscapes are constantly CHANGING. I will make CERTAIN that you are educated, well informed, and constantly updated. You will then be CONFIDENT that you are making the very best tax and investment decisions for you, your family, and your business.

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