Hi @paul-gennuso – nice job taking action on your profile! Below are my comments:

Good profile photo. Please zoom in more so we can see your face clearly. Also – please email it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background for you – this will help it look more professional.

You also need a good banner image. In that same email, tell Lindsey your field of business and she will create something custom for you!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

Your headline right now is in all capital letters making it very difficult to read. Let’s really make it POP! How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Instead of saying “YOUR 401K AND/OR IRA IS WORTH LESS THAN YOU THINK!” how about something more capturing.

What if I told you that your 401K AND your IRA is worth LESS than you think… 

Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized!

Pro tip: if you want – go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with making your points powerful in your sales letter because you have the perfect information, it just needs to look better.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!