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http://www.linkedin.com/in/sandireedrealtor
Not sure if it’s too wordy or if I should take out the testimonials…
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Hi @sandi-reed! Welcome to the program and a great job taking action on your profile! Below are my comments:
Nice background banner!
Your profile photo is showing too much of you body. Please zoom in 50% so we see more of your face. This is because the profile photos become very small when messaging so we want to make sure people can see your face clearly.
Love your headline – but I revised it below. I wanted to get rid of the “well” and the & symbol.
Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Kansas☆☞ Message Me!
About section:
Sandi, you’ve got some AWESOME information in your sales letter. I’d actually like you to go to Kent’s profile and use his About Me section outline and ADD your own information to it. It is what we teach in the program and this will really help you organize your points!
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Your testimonials should be 1-3 short and sweet sentences.
You also need a call to action:
If you’re READY for __________, then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
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@negeen-dargahi let me know if this sounds better!
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Hey @sandi-reed – NICE job taking action!!! The changes look good. I challenge you to replace some of your “I” with “you” so it keeps the focus on THEM.
After those changes, you are good to move forward 🙂
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@negeen-dargahi I think I’ve got it!
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