Maura,

We were on the call together yesterday and I heard you mention hiring an assistant. I am thinking of doing the same thing and would like to talk to you about it. I would appreciate it if you could call me at 978-490-4273.

Thanks,

Roger Hartley

Hi @maura-bain-2!! LOVE that you know exactly who you’re speaking to. There needs to be some more information on how you’ll help them and why they should work with you.

Fill out this fun outline to better help you with outlining your infomercial:

How about you start off asking up to 3 POWERFUL pain point questions…

Are you WANTING _________?
Do you NEED __________?

Want __________?

(after you ask 3 questions)

If you answered ‘YES’ to those questions, you came to the right place!

Hi, I’m _______ and I am a ____________ helping clients with _________.

(2-5 sentences saying HOW exactly you plan to help / how you serve your clients)

(you can add 1-2 more sentences about why they should work with you or maybe a motivating 1 liner to get them excited)

If you want _______________ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit.

—

ALSO, look at the comment above from @roger-hartley 🙂

Hi @maura-bain-2, nice job revising!

When reading your script, it wasn’t clear as to what you’re helping with. When you have sentences such as:

Are you WANTING a new start? I think, a start in what field?
Do you NEED empowerment? Empowerment in what?

Want a real professional in your corner? For what?

Hi, I’m Maura Bain  and I am a Realtor helping clients with transition. In what?

—

Do you see what I mean?

How about:

Do you want QUALIFIED buyers viewing your home?

Are you finally READY to take that next step and move into a new home?

Ready to work with a professional who LISTENS to your needs?

—

Maura, go in a little more detail about HOW you help your clients.

“When you work with ME, I make sure your home is listed for its highest value.”

^ more like that.

Please look back at the outline and fix the sentences 🙂

Let me know when you have revised it.

Hi @maura-bain-2 – good work! Please look below:

Are you finally READY to take that next step and move into a new home?

Do you want QUALIFIED buyers viewing your home?

Ready to work with a professional who LISTENS to your needs?

If that sounds like you, you came to the right person. Hi, I’m @maura-bain-2 and I’m a realtor helping clients like YOU find their new home!

When you work with ME, I make sure your home is listed for its highest value.

You will get the best of the latest technology for marketing your home so you get the results YOU want fast.

Have specific needs? Great – I’ll make sure they’re taken care of!

To me, your transaction isn’t closed until YOU are fully settled in your new home.

My fulfillment and my goal are to make YOUR home ownership dreams come true.

If you’re READY to take that next step with a trusted realtor, then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit.