It’s a great start! I LOVE the background pic and the image of you in it. However, the one of you in the profile looks blurry and like it’s from 20 years ago. Use another image from your shoot in the background image, OR just crop that one to the same (perfect) size as your current profile pic.

Your about section is great as a start. Now say LESS in each paragraph, and talk to them directly ALWAYS – you jump between the infinitive and 2nd person – stick with 2n person. For example:

Understanding Services in Real Estate is a tricky thing as many home owners do not buy or sell real estate for decades, and some do so few times in their lifetime.

becomes:

Maybe you haven’t needed to sell your home for years, even decades. So don’t you want an expert?

There are WAYYYYY too many words right now and it’s hard to expect someone to read all this.

Also, it looks to me like you’re using some keyword SEO? Is “Understanding Services in Real Estate” a longtail keyword phrase? If it is, I urge you to use more natural language, because people don’t search for phrases like that. They would instead search for “real estate services” or “great realtors near me” for example.

Last, you are talking to EVERYONE in your profile, so you might as well be talking to no one because they can’t hear you. Watch my videos in the Transformational Business Strategy Videos library (bottom middle module) on Positioning and on Your Perfect Client and then make sure you are talking ALWAYS to your perfect client on LinkedIn. Use your Perfect Client exercise to build your profile. It’s vital that you connect that with all the work you do here in the program.