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I just completed my LinkedIn profile. Could I please get your feedback.
Thank you
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Hi @maura-bain-2, you did a SUPER job on your profile! Below is my feedback:
Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer and have her add a white background for you?? Once she sends the photo back, please zoom in a pinch more so we can see your face clearly.
I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting and also doesn’t pertain to your business. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.
Headline:
This needs some work. How about filling out this template:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
Summary:
There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.
Right now, your first couple questions sound like your helping them more with packing and boxes so you really want to keep those questions after the “whats the best way to show off your home”.
“Tired of _____”
“Want to have QUALIFIED buyers looking at your home?”
“Are you ______?”
THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
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I would actually recommend you copying the format of this profile (this is what we taught in the program) and it would help more with organizing your points.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/
You have some great points but its a sales letter so less about you and more about how you will help them. Also, keep the testimonials to 3-4 sentences at max.
Call to action:
You need one!
If you’re READY for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions 🙂 great work!
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Ok here is the old headline-
Want to Sell Your Home Fast, With ZERO Stress & At Top Dollar? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Online Marketer & Realtor☆ ☞ Message Me!
So new headline would be –
Want to Sell Your Properties Fast, With ZERO Stress? ⭐ EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients in the Coastal Va Area ⭐ 👉 Message Me!
Body of the Bio-
👉 Tired of keeping your home “show ready”?
👉 Want to have QUALIFIED buyers looking at your home?
👉 Are you stressed about juggling work, family AND moving?
👉 Do you want someone who can handle all of the details of selling your home so you can carry on with your life? To help eliminate the stress and make your life and move easier?
Let me help you with suggestions:
*what’s the best way to show off your home.
* what repairs and updates are vital
*how to deal with contractors
….and moreIf you’re READY for results then SHOOT ME A MESSAGE on Linked In or call/text me at 757.418.2139 and let’s chat to see if we’re a good fit!
Ok let me know what you think. I made the change to the white background and asked the graphic designer to help with the background pic.
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Hi @maura-bain-2, great improvements but I do want the content to look like this:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/
I apologize if my feedback may have been confusing – just need a LITTLE bit more content in your About section 🙂
But all the content looks amazing!!
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Does Marcus have a 30 sec commercial on his site?
Im wondering where they will show up once I produce and post it?Thanks
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Hi @maura-bain-2, I actually don’t see it on his profile but we recommend adding it in the “media” section of your profile and also to your website or link at the bottom of your email signature.
Adding it to your media website is simple – imagine adding more text to your “About” section of your profile. If you just scroll more down on that page, it gives you an option to upload media or a link to a video.
Hope this helps 🙂
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