Hi @emily-stepper! Great to have you in the program and nice work taking action! Below is my feedback:

Good profile photo!!

While I like the idea you have for your banner image… it’s a tad grainy.

I’d also like you to email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This needs some work. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Here’s one a Dentist in the program did:

Want An UNFORGETTABLE Smile WITHOUT Having Crooked Yellow Teeth?☆ I Help YOU Get The Perfect SMILE ☆☞ Message me!

Summary:

There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.

Please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

They detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

You could start your summary off asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!

when you’re writing your testimonials, keep it SHORT. 1-2 sentences per testimonial.

I recommend looking back at the lesson 🙂

You also need a better call to action. How about this:

GOOD call to action!!

Please tag me in your revision 🙂