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    • March 2, 2019 at 5:35 pm #33256

      John McComas
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        @john@johnmccomas.com

        Negeen,

        Please review and critique this new and inproved infomercial.
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>Are you tired of caring for that big home?</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>Would you like to move closer to family and friends?</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>Has your family situation changed?</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>If the answer is yes to any of these questions, I can help.</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>What do I do?</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>I help you sell your home for top dollar so you can focus on the more important things… YOUR LIFE!</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>I eliminate the stress and I deliver qualified buyers when you’re ready to sell.</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>My team and I will handle all of the complicated paperwork while keeping you informed every step of the way.</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>If you want to work with a REALTOR who understands business and wants to help you, not his own bottom line, by delivering what you want, while keeping the stress level as seamless as possible…then</p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”> </p>
        <p style=”margin: 0in; margin-bottom: .0001pt;”>SHOOT ME A MESSAGE or call/text me at 303-668-5542 to start your new chapter.</p>

      • March 2, 2019 at 5:41 pm #33258

        John McComas
        Participant
          @john@johnmccomas.com

          Negeen,

          I noticed formatting code was included in my last email. It might have picked up from me sending it to myself from my iPhone.

          Try this one.

          Are you tired of caring for that big home?

          Would you like to move closer to family and friends?

          Has your family situation changed?

          If the answer is yes to any of these questions, I can help.

          What do I do?

          I help you sell your home for top dollar so you can focus on the more important things… YOUR LIFE!

          I eliminate the stress and I deliver qualified buyers when you’re ready to sell.

          My team and I will handle all of the complicated paperwork while keeping you informed every step of the way.

          If you want to work with a REALTOR who understands business and wants to help you, not his own bottom line, by delivering what you want, while keeping the stress level as seamless as possible…then

          SHOOT ME A MESSAGE or call/text me at 303-668-5542 to start your new chapter.

        • March 4, 2019 at 4:23 pm #33339

          n d
          Keymaster
            @negeen@coredm.com

            Hi @john-mccomas! SUPER job on your infomercial!

            Instead of saying:

            What do I do?

            I help you sell your home for top dollar so you can focus on the more important things… YOUR LIFE!

            Try:

            Hi, I’m @john-mccomas and I’m an EXPERT realtor helping you sell your home for top dollar so you can focus on the more important things… YOUR LIFE!

            So, instead of reading off your phone number in the infomercial video, you can just ask them to message you on LI to see if you two are a good fit.

            AND if you don’t know how to edit a video, you can send the video over to someone on fivver.com and they can add your phone number and email in the video at the end so you won’t have to read it off.

            Great work!!

          • March 4, 2019 at 5:30 pm #33347

            John McComas
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              @john@johnmccomas.com

              Thanks, Negeen. Great input.

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