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Please review and give me feedback. Thanks, John
Are you tired of CARING for that BIG HOME?
Do you want to move closer to FAMILY or FRIENDS?
Has your family SITUATION changed?
WHAT I DO IN 20 WORDS OR LESS!
In a nutshell, I help you sell your home for top dollar so you can focus on more important things…YOUR LIFE!
I eliminate the STRESS of where your next property is coming from and can deliver qualified buyers when you’re ready to sell.
WHOM DO I WORK WITH? Individuals, Families, Investors
My team and I will handle all the complicated paperwork while keeping you informed every step of the way until you have the 🗝keys to YOUR NEW HOME.
Want an example?
I recently was contacted by one of my past clients. He let me know his family situation had changed. I met with him on Thursday and got right to work. I reached out to my network and without even listing the property he had an offer for top dollar Sunday evening.
I know what you are thinking…
Well John, if I don’t know the area or live out of state, will you still work for me?
ABSOLUTELY! That’s the beauty of working with me. I KNOW the area and have lived here for over 46 years! I take all the hard work typical with listing or searching properties and make it easy for you!
“I’m really glad I called you.”
Those words are music to my ears. I could play them over and over.The way I operate for you is a little different from most Realtors! As the former owner of several businesses, I understand information is power. You will receive statistics and buy and sell strategies that I’ve learned over my career, while I push to act fast and deliver results for YOU.
This adds a “LESS STRESS, MORE TIME FOR YOU” approach to buying/selling properties.
If you want to work with an agent who understands business and wants to help YOU not his own bottom line, delivering what YOU want, while keeping the stress end as seamless as possible…
👉🏼 SHOOT ME A MESSAGE or call/text me at 303-668-5542 to start YOUR new chapter.
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Great job, @john-mccomas!!
I think you mean this is your profile summary, correct? Not your infomercial, I believe. I am just checking!
Cleanup: remove “in a nutshell” because it’s making that paragraph more than 20 words. Also, you will want a colon instead of ! On the sentence above it.
Remember that you are aiming at a single perfect client – EITHER a buyer OR a seller – not both. Make sure the whole document is written toward your perfect client. This is your perfect client on Linkedin, not your perfect client in your whole business.
WHO do I work with, not WHOM
I would take out “I know what you ARE thinking… Well, John” because that was not what I was thinking! Just start the sentence with “What if I don’t know the area…“
Change: This adds a less stress…
To: this means less stress… and take out the word approach as well – it’s not really an approach, it’s a result, and you want it to look like a result because it’s a great one!
You need a comma before “not his own bottom line”
Great call to action at the end!
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