Hi @diane-wiley! Nice job taking action on your profile. Below is my feedback:

Good profile photo! Can you email it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background for you??

You also need a background photo (the blue rectangle behind your profile photo) — in the email, please tell her your field of business and she will create something great for you to use.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

I do not like that you have ” I PUT A ROOF OVER YOUR FAMILY’S HEAD!”

This is way too aggressive and not a good use of this space.

How about filling out this template and copy and pasting in the headline slot:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.

Please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program.

Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

They detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You could start your summary off asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!

Call To Action:

You need one that is shorter and right to the point. How about this:

If you’re ready for _______ then message me here TODAY on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision 🙂

Hi @diane-wiley, you need to EMAIL Lindsey – she is not able to communicate through this platform.

Please EMAIL her the above at:

Lindsey@coredm.com

Thank you!