5 years, 10 months ago-
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Please review my LinkedIn Profile.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/workhappinessexpert/
Best,
Jody Miller
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Checking in to see if you have had a chance to review my profile. I changed my headline just now to be a little more focused.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/workhappinessexpert/
Thanks so much.
Best,
Jody
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Hi @jody-miller! Nice job taking action – below is my feedback:
Profile Photo:
I love that you are speaking in your photo but it doesn’t make sense to have that as your main profile photo because I can’t see your face clearly and you’re not looking at the camera. Use the photo of you that you have as your background photo. This one is more personal and inviting.Background Photo:
I like this but it looks like the dimensions are a little too small for the cover space. I’d like you to email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her create a better one for you. Just tell her about your field of business, what images you want her to use, and she will get to work on that.Lindsey@coredm.com
Headline:
Love your headline! There are too many capitalized words in this which are making it hard to read. Below I’ve correctly capitalized the important words.WANT to INCREASE Employee ENGAGEMENT and PRODUCTIVITY in your company?☆ I’m The Work Happiness Expert☆☞Let’s Connect!
Summary:
Okay so you have good content but not nearly enough about what you do…
By this I mean, in a few sentences you talk about what you do but then you have a LOT of short testimonials. This is fine but you want to lead people through your sales letter.
WHO do your work with, HOW do you help them, etc.
Here’s what I’d love for you to do.
I want you to COPY Kent’s profile outline and just add your information to it + THREE of your favorite short testimonials. Then, tag me to review.
The reason I want you to do this is that you need better organization of your points and Kent has that.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
I look forward to seeing your revision 🙂
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Negeen,
I just loaded another pic I found from my interview on GMArizona. Might be a good background photo. I changed the profile. Will also email Lindsey unless you like this combo?
https://www.linkedin.com/in/workhappinessexpert/
Best,
Jody
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WHAT I DO IN 25 WORDS OR LESS.
“I Help YOU Increase Employee Engagement and Productivity at your company, which means you save money chasing talent. Why? Your employees won’t leave.
I allow you to focus on Running Your Business INSTEAD of grabbing at straws to keep your employees happily performing and onboard.
I eliminate your STRESS of where your next employee exit will come from because it won’t.
I WORK WITH CEOs, COOs, CHO’S, Human Resources, Culture Managers – in Companies throughout the world.
EMPLOYEE ENGAGEMENT – When YOUR Employees feel happy and passionate about their jobs, are committed to your company, and put dedicated effort into their work.
Want an example?
I saved an entire revenue generating team from exiting a division of a global company because they felt unappreciated, unheard and disconnected. By measuring happiness, designing and delivering a custom workshop, no one left. In fact, each team member found a renewed commitment to the company. Revenues soared, as well as happiness, engagement, and productivity.
What feedback did I get?
“Jody was transformational. She delivered the message we needed to hear and we came up with fantastic, collaborative solutions. Our entire team loved her!”
“Jody was transformational.” Those are three words I love to hear.
You may be thinking…
Well, Jody, How much does an employee engagement workshop program cost?
How about this answer?
Less than what you would pay a Recruiter to fill one position.
And as for measuring happiness in real-time? Less than the cost of a latte per employee.
This is ME helping you gain COMPLETE control of your workforce’s happiness, engagement, and productivity.
==> DISCLOSURE:
If you don’t have a true desire to save on talent acquisition costs and increase bottom line revenues, then I CAN’T HELP YOU. BUT IF YOU REALLY CARE ABOUT TRANSFORMING YOUR WORKFORCE, we should work together.
Call or Message ME: ☎ 415-509-4851 / Email✉ jody@jodybmiller.com
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Hi @jody-miller! WOW, this looks so much better – super job taking that action to revise!
Let’s zoom in a bit more on your profile photo so we can clearly see your smiling face and less of the bottom half of your body. Great photo!
The reason I recommended Lindsey, our graphic designer, was because she can actually take whatever image you like, and she will add in some text + your company name and really make it POP!
Go ahead and email her and see what she comes up with 😉
Summary:
What you have is so much better – there ARE a lot of “i” but I went ahead and revised your summary for you, to avoid confusion.
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WHAT I DO IN 25 WORDS OR LESS.
“I Help YOU Increase Employee Engagement and Productivity at your company, which means you save money chasing talent. Why? Your employees won’t leave.”
Essentially…
When you work with me… YOU get to focus on running your business INSTEAD of grabbing at straws to keep your employees happily performing and onboard.
Eliminate your STRESS of where your next employee exit will come from.
Guess what? It won’t!
WHO I WORK WITH: CEOs, COOs, CHO’S, Human Resources, Culture Managers – in Companies throughout the world.
Best part?
Employee engagement INCREASES. How?
When YOUR employees feel happy and passionate about their jobs, are committed to your company… they put a dedicated effort into their work.
Want an example?
I saved an entire revenue generating team from exiting a division of a global company because they felt unappreciated, unheard and disconnected. By measuring happiness, designing and delivering a custom workshop, no one left. Revenues soared, as well as happiness, engagement, and productivity.
What feedback did I get?
“Jody was transformational. She delivered the message we needed to hear and we came up with fantastic, collaborative solutions. Our entire team loved her!”
“Jody was transformational.” Those are three words I love to hear.
You may be thinking…
Well, Jody, How much does an employee engagement workshop program cost?
How about this answer?
Less than what you would pay a Recruiter to fill one position.
And as for measuring happiness in real-time? Less than the cost of a latte per employee.
This is ME helping you gain COMPLETE control of your workforce’s happiness, engagement, and productivity.
==> DISCLOSURE:
If you don’t have a true desire to save on talent acquisition costs and increase bottom line revenues, then I CAN’T HELP YOU. BUT if you really care about TRANSFORMING your workforce… we should work together.
Call or Message ME: 415-509-4851 / Email jody@jodybmiller.com
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Thank you @negeen-dargahi. I also emailed Lindsey with a link to all of my photos to use.
🙂 Jody
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