Hi, @frank-petras This is an improvement! There are just a few things to change to make it flow better and sound more natural. Here is how I would re-write it:

Do you want to sell your luxury home in Naples, Florida for top dollar?

Are you dreading a time-consuming selling process?

Do you want to have a stress-free experience surrounding the sale of your home?

If you answered “yes” to these questions, you came to the right place!

Hi, I’m Frank Petras and I sell high-end luxury homes in Naples, Florida.

I will sell your home for you quickly, without the burden of stress, and I will get you top dollar!

I have a very unique approach to getting your home sold, and I provide you concierge service, which means you will have a high-end experience while I sell your high-end home!

If you want an expert marketer and negotiator to get this job done for you, then message me here on LinkedIn or call me at (239) 595-2221 to see if we are a good fit for working together.

How does that sound to you, Frank?

Hi @frank-petras, this will be the only video you will record of yourself, but you will be doing a webinar later in the program, which you do not have to film yourself for.