An excellent profile and engagingly written. To be sure any potential investor would be inspired by your profile. I am a Real Estate Sales Executive, and I will be on the lookout through my Florida Goldcoast Circuit for properties for you to consider for an investment project. Well done.

• This reply was modified 5 years, 11 months ago by Avron White.

Hi @vernon-henry, nice job taking action! Below is my feedback I’d like you to implement:

Nice profile photo! Can you email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background for you? This will help it look more professional.

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This is the best piece of ‘real estate’ on your LinkedIn profile.

This needs some work. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis on you and not enough on them.

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

I know you’re a real estate investor… but these will be great to copy or refer to:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/laurabarkerjd/

https://www.linkedin.com/in/bre-zientarski/

https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you.

Call To Action:

You need one!

If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!