Hi @robert-jenkins! Nice job revising on your profile – below is my feedback:

Your background photo and headline looks SO much better 🙂

Your profile still needs some work – it’s still focused on you when you start off saying “my” or “i”.

Can you copy the outline of this profile and just add in your own information? I say this because you need to improve the organization of your content and format.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You do need more information.

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you.

Remember, this is your sales letter so you want to provide them with informative information and lead them through your profile.

The example I provided should really help you see what I’m looking for.

Call To Action:

You need one!

If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!