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Hi, @jeff-sandridge-2! A really nice job on your profile! Below is my feedback:
Great profile photo!
Your background photo is not the best. I’d like you to email our graphic designer, tell her about your field of business, and have her create a new one for you.
Headline:
I like where you’re going with your headline, but it could be better. How about this:
Want to RECHARGE Your Life WITHOUT Making Someone Else Rich? ☆I’m an EXPERT Real Estate Investor In [LOCATION]☆☞ MSG Me!
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Want an INCREASE in CASH flow WITHOUT Being In Property Management?☆ I Help You Gain Freedom☆ EXPERT Investment Representative☆☞ Message Me!
Summary:
You’re asking about 3 questions in one sentence and instead, ask 3 POWERFUL (short and sweet) pain point questions your clients struggle with.
“Tired of _____”
“Want _______ but CANT?”
“Are you ______?”
Then, after you should say:
“If this sounds like you… I know EXACTLY how to help.”
When you work with me, you get ___________.
Essentially…
_____________.
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You’ve got great content BUT you just need to better organize your points.
Check out these profile examples to get inspired from. You can even copy their format and add in your own information.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/Call To Action:
You have a lot of run-on sentences, like the last paragraph in your profile.
How about something like this:
If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me in your revision! You’re SO close!
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