Hi @robert-jenkins – please make a new post next time and not on someone else’s forum. To do that just click on the correct forum topic and scroll to the very bottom to write in the text box. I moved your post to a new one.

Nice job taking action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Great profile photo!

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

NICE start! I revamped your headline to make it really pop. You can copy and paste in the headline slot.

Want To Find Your Dream Island Home WITHOUT The Hassle Of Searching?☆EXPERT Realtor In [LOCACTION]☆☞ Message Me!

(just fill in the location blank)

Summary:

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis on you and not enough on them.

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

(check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you.

You need more information in your profile.

Call To Action:

You need one!

If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂