Hi @nicholas-brown! Nice job taking action on your profile!

Please make a new post next time in this forum by scrolling to the very bottom and writing in the text box instead of an already made post.

Profile Photo:

I’d like you to get a NEW photo. Having sunglasses on and not smiling makes your profile very unprofessional looking and we want to fix that. Consider taking a photo smiling in a nice outfit, like the one you are wearing in the photo.

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This is the best piece of ‘real estate’ on your LinkedIn profile. Let’s really make it POP. Fill this out:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

OR

Want Your Student To Be ACCEPTED Into One Of The BEST Universities? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

You did a really good job talking about THEM and how you are going to help your clients!

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

I know you’re not a realtor, but consider copying their outline or copying Kent Littlejohn’s profile format.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You want to provide information that is:

Look at the way those profiles ORGANIZE their points to lead you through their sales letter 😉 lets get yours to look similar.

Call To Action:

I like what you have but let’s make it concise.

“If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂