6 years, 1 month ago-
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Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:
Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background for you?
You also need a background photo. When you email Lindsey, tell her a little about your field of business and she will create a background graphic for you to display.
Headline:
Your current headline is on the right path! I’d like it to be better organized. Just fill in the blanks and copy and paste into the headline slot.
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
Summary:
I like where you’re going with the information you provided but it’s way too many “this is what we do” and less “here’s EXACTLY how I can help YOU” — let’s add some personality to your sales letter.
How about this…
I’d like you to copy Kent’s profile and add in your OWN information to it. The reason:
I love the way Kent leads his readers through his points and I feel your profile can greatly benefit by this. Notice the format, how he tells his reader who he works with, what he does, etc.
Kent’s profile –>
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
You also need a better call to action:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me in your revision 🙂
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