Hi @peter-neufeldt! Nice job taking action – below is my feedback:

GREAT profile photo! Super clean and professional.

You NEED a background photo (which you add a photo by clicking on the pencil icon next to your name and you will see another pencil for the background photo – click and upload)

Our graphic designer can create a background photo for you. Just email her and tell her a little about your business and she will get it created.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

Fill this out:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
Summary:

(copy Kent’s profile outline – this will seriously help your message)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

You don’t really have enough information and I’d like you to refer to those examples of what we want your profile to look like!

Outline of summary you can follow and fill in:

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important. How about you list 3 questions your clients struggle with. What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?”

THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
2 sentences how are you different than your competitors

Who you like to work with

Then add a call to action with your contact info:

If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!

Hi @peter-neufeldt!

Really great progress with your profile! I definitely see some improvements.

However, there are a few things that Negeen mentioned above that you have not changed. Have you emailed Lindsey about that background photo yet?

Your headline needs tweaking to make it more interesting and engaging. Fill this in:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Again, check out Kent’s profile that Negeen linked above.

I really like your pain point questions!

You have some great information in your summary however, you need to make it more about THEM.  Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bulls eye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

Tag me and @negeen-dargahi in your revision!