Hi @susan-swanne! No problem, I’ll provide templates for your profile below so just update the information as needed.

Background Cover Photo:

You need a better background photo. What you have now doesn’t relate to your field of business. I want you to email our graphic designer, tell her about your field of business and ask her to create a background photo for you, okay?

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

What you have is good but let’s make it visually appealing. COPY AND PASTE what I redid below:

Ready To SELL Your Home For TOP Value WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT Real Estate Adviser Helping SENIORS In Tucson, AZ☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

Few things I noticed first hand is you have questions but in random areas. It’s best to start off asking only 3 POWERFUL pain point questions and then getting into your points. You also have THICK paragraphs and THICK testimonials that no one is going to read. If you want to write a testimonial, make it 1 sentence long each.

Below is an outline to re-do your summary. Remember, Su, don’t make paragraphs chunky. Add space between points and look at the examples:

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Summary:

(examples below)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You don’t really have enough information and I’d like you to refer to those examples of what we want your profile to look like!

Outline of summary you can follow and fill in:

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important. How about you list 3 questions your clients struggle with. What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?”

THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
2 sentences how are you different than your competitors

Who you like to work with

Then add a call to action with your contact info:

If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if we’re a good fit!