7 replies, 2 voices Last updated by nancy anderson 5 years, 11 months ago
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    • #17925

      nancy anderson
      Participant
        @nancy@bayareaeliteproperties.com

        @negeen-dargahi  @halle-eavelyn  @kent-littlejohn

         

        Are you worried you don’t have enough information to sell your home?  Do you want your home sale to be Stress-free?  Do you want to dominate all the negotiations?  Sound to good to be true? It might, but with over 20 years experience in real estate, I can tell you that you can have your cake and eat it too; when you work with Bay Area Elite Properties.

        I educate my clients on current market conditions, economic basis and upcoming developments then engineer a marketing plan that will sell your home for top dollar; all while eliminating stress and saving you time and money!

        Stop worrying about the contingencies and complicated paperwork.  My honest expert advice on pricing and staging will set you apart from any competition.

        If you want your home sale to be Stress-free, please call me today to discuss working together  (281) 532-6600;  I look forward to hearing from you.

         

        NOTE:  I have concern whether I should use company name in paragraph 1.  I questions whether I should write (speak) this in the singular person or plural.

        tips are greatly appreciated 🙂

      • #17952

        n d
        Keymaster
          @negeen@coredm.com

          Hi @nancy-anderson, a really nice job with your infomercial! Yes, I agree. Take out your company name and directly market yourself instead.

          Your questions are good but a little generic. Really dive into their emotions and worries like:

          Is your house STILL on the market and you’re running out of time??

          Is the stress of selling your home the LAST thing you want to worry about right now?

          Do you need QUALIFIED buyers looking at your property for maximum profit??

          — Your 2nd paragraph of “i educate” can really be better and more powerful. Try starting it off like:

          When you work with me, YOU get _________. Yep! You hear that right. ________.

          ^ see how attention grabbing that is? Just make sure your message isn’t dry.

          Great work regardless. Tag me in your revision 🙂

           

           

        • #18315

          nancy anderson
          Participant
            @nancy@bayareaeliteproperties.com

            @negeen-dargahi  @kent-littlejohn  @halle-eavelyn

             

            Here’s the 2nd draft …

             

            Is your house STILL on the market and you’re running out of time??

            Is the stress of selling your home the LAST thing you want to worry about right now?

            Do you need QUALIFIED buyers looking at your property for maximum profit??

            When you work with me YOU get over 20 years of experience in real estate in your pocket!  YOU get an engineered marketing plan to maximize the dollars in your pocket and you get QUALIFIED – READY TO BUY BUYERS!  Yep! You heard that right.  Qualified – Ready to buy buyers!

            Stop worrying about the contingencies and complicated paperwork.  My honest expert advice on pricing and staging will set you apart from any competition.

            If you want your home sale to be Enjoyable and Stress-free, call me today to discuss working together  (281) 532-6600;  I look forward to hearing from you.

             

             

          • #18319

            n d
            Keymaster
              @negeen@coredm.com

              Really nice work, @nancy-anderson!

              Don’t forget to introduce yourself after you say you can help them!

              Take out “Qualified – Ready to buy buyers!” after “Yep! You heard that right.”

              Other than that, looks great!!

            • #18321

              nancy anderson
              Participant
                @nancy@bayareaeliteproperties.com

                Let’s see if I’ve got this … 3rd times a charm 🙂

                 

                Is your house STILL on the market and you’re running out of time??

                Is the stress of selling your home the LAST thing you want to worry about right now?

                Do you need QUALIFIED buyers looking at your property for maximum profit??

                When you work with me YOU get over 20 years of experience in real estate in your pocket!  YOU get an engineered marketing plan to maximize the dollars in your pocket and you get QUALIFIED – READY TO BUY BUYERS!  Yep! You heard that right.

                I’m Nancy Anderson, Broker/Realtor, and I will make your home sale ENJOYABLE and STREES-FREE.

                Stop worrying about the contingencies and complicated paperwork.  My honest expert advice on pricing and staging will set you apart from any competition.

                Call me today to discuss working together  (281) 532-6600;  I look forward to hearing from you.

              • #18393

                n d
                Keymaster
                  @negeen@coredm.com

                  Love it, @nancy-anderson!

                  Great work revising and taking action.

                  I look forward to this being filmed 🙂

                   

                • #18404

                  nancy anderson
                  Participant
                    @nancy@bayareaeliteproperties.com

                    @negeen-dargahi  @kent-littlejohn  @halle-eavelyn

                     

                    I have downloaded the ‘oratory’ teleprompter app on my android (phone).  I do not understand how to make this show up when I open the camera (video) app 🙁

                    I’ve searched YouTube and google and can’t find anything to help!

                    Obviously, I’m not very techie.

                     

                     

                     

                  • #25040

                    nancy anderson
                    Participant
                      @nancy@bayareaeliteproperties.com

                      @negeen-dargahi

                      @halle-eavelyn

                      @kent-littlejohn

                      HERE’s my RE-WRITE for ‘home buyers’

                       

                      Are you ready to Make a Move?

                      Great!

                      I help EXCITED home buyers like YOU who are READY to relocate within Houston’s Greater Bay Area.

                      By removing the common STRESS of purchasing a home and even throwing in some FUN and EXCITEMENT I’ll make your next move Great.

                      I’m Nancy Anderson, Broker/Realtor at Bay Area Elite Properties and my team specializes in accentuating neighborhood’s unique nuances while providing YOU an understanding of everything this great area has to offer… including Schools, entertainment and social necessities.

                      As a hub of the healthcare, petrochemical and aerospace industries Clear Lake and the Greater Galveston Bay area is a much sought after community for home buyers like YOU.

                      When we work together YOU Get Over 20 years of experience of negotiating home purchase contracts in YOUR Pocket!  –

                      Stop worrying about the contingencies and complicated paperwork and Call 281-532-6600 Today and discover what sets us apart!

                      Let’s get YOU Moving

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