Hi @alan-morris!

Nice work taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

You need a background image. Our graphic designer can actually create one for you. All you need to do is email her and tell her about your field of business and she can send one to you right away.

Lindsey@coredm.com 

Great profile photo!!

Headline (words under your name) — this needs work but I LOVE that you focused on selling instead of both buying and selling. I’d like to you fill this out and add it to that location:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

(examples below)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You really need to work on the format of your profile (refer to examples, copy their outline if needed).

Please avoid bullet points and LEAD them through your sales letter.

Outline of summary you can follow and fill in:

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important. How about you list 3 questions your clients struggle with. What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?”

THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
2 sentences how are you different than your competitors

Who you like to work with

Then add a call to action with your contact info:

If you want _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if we’re a good fit!

___

Or, copy the outline of the examples and fill in your own information in them.

Tag me in your revision 🙂