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@negeen-dargahi @halle-eavelyn @kent-littlejohn @anthony-simonie
Hello! This is my current title for my Hero Story:
How EMBRACING CHANGE taught me how to overcome LOSING NEARLY EVERYTHING (INCLUDING MY LIFE) to ACHIEVE PHENOMENAL SUCCESS DOING WHAT I LOVE MOST – HELPING PEOPLE!
Problems I need help with:
- It is too long
- It doesn’t tie into helping my target audience – insurance brokers and company owners
I feel like “helping people” is just way too vague to have any real meaning! What I do is help companies and brokers both to improve their bottom line by protecting and empowering the employees. I can’t seem to come up with anything concise or that has any kind of a punch with it. I really appreciate your feedback and suggestions on this!
Thanks!
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Hi @laura-barker, how about starting with the bad and ending with the good. Such as:
Why LOSING NEARLY EVERYTHING (INCLUDING MY LIFE) _______And How YOU Can ________.
^ Kind of how Kent has his.
I do like yours, but I feel it can be more powerful. Make a mental list of other ways your story can help someone (including helping others).
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@negeen-dargahi @halle-eavelyn – what do you think of this for my Hero Story title? I like it MUCH better than anything else I have come up with.
I am thinking about using Fiverr to create a whiteboard animation for the beginning of part 2. I want it to show in 30 seconds my life up until “IT” happened. What do you think?
How I overcame losing nearly everything (including my LIFE) to launch 2 successful businesses doing what I love most – Helping People – and how you can do the same (without the pain).
Which words would you put in caps?
Thanks!
Laura
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