Hi @mark-mease! Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer and have her add a white background for you?? Once she sends the photo back, please zoom in more so we can see your face clearly.

I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This needs some work. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.

Please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

They detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bulls eye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

You could start your summary off asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!

• when you’re writing your testimonials, keep it SHORT. 1 sentence per testimonial.

You also need a better call to action. How about this:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision 🙂

• This reply was modified 6 years, 2 months ago by n d.

Hi @mark-mease! Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer and have her add a white background for you?? Once she sends the photo back, please zoom in more so we can see your face clearly.

I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This needs some work. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.

Please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

They detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bulls eye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

You could start your summary off asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!

when you’re writing your testimonials, keep it SHORT. 1 sentence per testimonial.
You also need a better call to action. How about this:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision 🙂

Hi @mark-mease ! Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback

Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer and have her add a white background to you?? Once she sends the photo back, please zoom in more so we can see your face clearly.

I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This needs some work. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.

Please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

They detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bulls eye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

You could start your summary off asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!

when you’re writing your testimonials, keep it SHORT. 1 sentence per testimonial.
You also need a better call to action. How about this:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision 🙂

Hi @mark-mease! Great job revising!!

Your background photo and profile photo seriously transformed the vibe of your LI profile!

Headline:

Let’s really make it POP as it’s the best piece of real estate on your profile. Copy and paste this into your headline slot instead:

Want to Find Your PERFECT Home WITHOUT Added Stress? ☆ EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In The Reading Area☆☞ Message Me!

Summary:

Take out the comma after “investors” in your who i work with

YES YES YES! Great work on the rest 🙂