Hi @thomas-dale-2, would you mind providing your profile link, please 🙂

Hi @thomas-dale-2!

LOVE the background photo, so much better!

Your profile picture could really be better. If you could have someone take a photo of you that has color and isn’t a hue of grey and blue, that would be great!

Headline looks superb!! Nice work on that!

Summary:

Right now, you have a LOT of “i” in there.

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bulls eye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

For your summary, here how you can start it off better:

What I Do In A Few Words:

I help clients and companies TRANSFORM empty walls into a professional STATEMENT piece.

Essentially…

With my expertise in art and design, I can truly change the atmosphere of any environment!

WHO I WORK WITH:

Clients who are __________, _________, _________, and MORE!

When you work with me, you not only get __________ but you ALSO get _______.

YES. You read that right!

Here’s what clients have said:

[THOMAS, write 1 sentence worth of testimonial, that’s it]

**again, please refer to Kent’s profile outline here —> https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/