Hi @thomas-dale-2! Nice work on taking action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Profile Photo:

Do you have the photo you’re using in color? The black and white photo is easily forgettable and is a bit grainy. I want it to look as professional as possible.

Background Photo:

You need a better background photo. Something like an art gallery or the interior of a beautiful home with art on the walls. This needs to draw the imagination of your viewers. Our graphic designer can actually create one for you!!

Just email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your business and she will create it for you. She can also add a white background to your profile photo.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This needs to be better. This is the best piece of real estate and I really want you to utilize it. How about filling this template out:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

So, what I see right now is not a sales letter. It’s a big paragraph. Thomas, I really want you to suck your viewers in when they click on your profile.

WHO do you work with, WHY should they work with you, HOW do you serve your clients??

How about doing this… I want you to copy Kent’s LI profile outline and add in your own information to it to really make it stand out.

Sound good??

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

You also need a better call to action!

“If you’re READY to  __________ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!”

Please go back through the profile accelerator and tag me in your revision.