@tom-rasmussen – I moved your infomercial to the correct forum. Below is what you wrote and below that is my feedback:

Are you feeling anxious about the home you want to sell?

Are you going through a major life event such as a retirement, divorce, death, new baby….you name it!

Or, are you worried about hurting the feelings of a friend, neighbor or even a family member?

If this sounds like you..  I know EXACTLY how to help.

Hi, I’m Tom Rasmussen and I am a licensed real estate broker helping clients just like you for over 15 years.

Our listings are viewed by 400% more buyers than our closest competitor.  This allows us to sell your home faster & for more money.

A significant amount of our business comes from sellers that tried with someone that was unable to sell their home.  The friend, the neighbor or the family member with a limited amount of experience or ability.  My Goal is to make you so happy with us that you refer me to others before we’ve even closed on your home.

Just in case you didn’t hear me before.  400% more buyers.  That’s the same thing as saying 4 times more buyers.  That’s HUGE.  The more buyers that look at your home the faster it will sell & the higher the sale price will be.

We accomplish all of this and more in a safe, friendly & courteous environment.  I make my living by making people happy.

If you feel like we should talk, then message me or call TODAY at 630-762-3912 to see if we’re a good fit.

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Much much better. Take out “I make my living by making people happy.” since you already wrote the referral part. You don’t want to sound too desperate for sales. You want to remain alpha and act like you don’t really need the extra work, you know what I mean?

Good work!! Okay, now, please watch Halle’s “video tips” video which are in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bulls eye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

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