Tagline Review

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- May 31, 2018 at 8:02 pm #12866
  Eric Calciano
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  @ecalciano@newcityinsurance.com
  Hi @negeen-dargahi!
  
  I was going through my profile with my business partner, and he didn’t like my original tagline. Could you give your opinion between these 2 and the reason why you prefer one versus the other?
  
  Version 1:
  
  Want to ATTRACT TOP Talent For YOUR Business With Premier Benefits? ☆ I can help! ☆ ☞ Message Me!
  
  Version 2:
  
  Premier Insurance Broker | Want to ATTRACT TOP TALENT For Your Business With Benefits? ⭐ I can help! ☞ Message Me!
  
  Thanks!
- June 1, 2018 at 10:34 am #12895
  Halle Eavelyn
  Moderator
  @halle@coredm.com
  The 1st one is better because it’s all about THEM! Premier Insurance Broker is about YOU and it’s right up front. Make sense? Talent should be capitalized in the first one as well.
  
  Who won the debate?
  - June 1, 2018 at 12:30 pm #12928
    Eric Calciano
    Participant
    
    @ecalciano@newcityinsurance.com
    Hi @halle-eavelyn,
    
    Thank you for the feedback! I was for Version 1 and Jeff was for Version 2, so I guess I win 🙂
    
    Do you think I should include anything in the Version 1 that says insurance? Jeff was concerned that just saying benefits might be too vague for the potential client to understand just through the headline.
- June 1, 2018 at 1:18 pm #12934
  Halle Eavelyn
  Moderator
  @halle@coredm.com
  How about: Premier Insurance Benefits? That sounds like it will do the trick.
  
  Glad you won, @eric-calciano, LOL
  - June 1, 2018 at 1:23 pm #12936
    Eric Calciano
    Participant
    
    @ecalciano@newcityinsurance.com
    @halle-eavelyn
    
    Thanks! haha
    
    I think that will do the trick!
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