Great job taking Massive Imperfect Action!!  @caroline-lanza, I would definitely ask ONE question at the top, not 3. If you look at your profile as others see it, you will see that it’s cut off about a third of the way through your 3rd question.  So you are only making one point (for now) before they have to click to read more.  That means you are losing valuable “real estate” by making that one point multiple times.  With one question, you have 2 lines left to hook them so they WILL click Read More!

This line in your header: Happy To Help With Your Real Estate Needs.  – is not effective.  Of COURSE you are happy to help them.  That’s why you are in business.

Take a look a the profile edits @negeen-dargahi has done for many other Realtor clients, and you will see other examples you can pull from.  Read through the LinkedIn Profile Reviews & Questions forum for a LOT of other examples that will help.

Make sure you write in FIRST person (I) not 3rd person (Caroline).  Everyone knows it’s an individual profile so it makes it seem more accessible.  And… MOST IMPORTANT… really write in 2nd person (YOU) – tell everyone what’s in it for them when they work with you!! Please watch my Benefits Marketing video in the Transformational Business Strategy module – from your modules dashboard, scroll down to the bottom middle and click on the icon.  The videos are all in alphabetical order. That will help you really understand the value of all this.

Keep up the great work!!