Hi @carol-clark!

Great profile photo and headline!

I like the way you formatted your summary but I want you to REALLY grab my attention with your first sentence. It is the most important. How about you start your summary off asking 3 POWERFUL pain point questions and THEN getting into what your title is and who you work with.

When you say “message me. I can help” …. this could be better.

Instead try:
<p class=”p1″>If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if we’re a good fit!</p>

Great job, @carol-clark!! A couple things… Sentence case OR Title Case, but not all lower case, for your headline!  You have NO CTA (call to action) in your headline! Add: Message me! at the end.

That’s where I come in. I’m your ((((secret weapon)))).  <- take out all those parentheses!  You sound like a side bar or afterthought.  Make it ALL CAPS FOR EMPHASIS! YOU are important!!

I’d take out the logo png.  LinkedIn just does dumb things with it and it looks weird – like it keeps adding the LINK not just the image.

to see [IF] I have just the something extra your business needs. <- You’re missing a word here – I think it’s if??

Overall, I LOVE your profile – extremely well-written and compelling and your stats are AWESOME!!!

YAY!!!