Hi @frederick-braun! Really nice work, below is my feedback:

Headline is great, I just want to add one more touch. Please copy and paste this in there –>

Do You NEED A Forensic Expert With Hands-On Machinery, Process, AND Controls Experience?☆☞ MSG Me!

Summary:

I want you to start your summary off asking 3 pain point questions YOUR ideal client deals with. You want to keep it about THEM! So, ask 3 short and sweet pain point questions and then introduce yourself and what you do.

Then list in a few words WHO you work with and HOW you help them, which you did.

Please, format like Kent and break up some of the thicker paragraphs 🙂

—-> https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

You need a better call to action:

If you want __________, then message or call me TODAY to ______.