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@negeen-dargahi @kent-littlejohn
I’ve completed the LinkedIn profile and would love to hear your thoughts and recommendations on this… sending a third time, but with tags (should I have done this to begin with?).
https://www.linkedin.com/in/diantaylor1/
Thank you,
Dian
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Hi @dian-taylor! Yes, it’s so much easier when you directly tag me in your posts đ below is my feedback…
Nice work taking massive imperfect action on your profile!
Great profile photo! Can you email your picture to our graphic designer and have her add in a white background for you â>
Lindsey@coredm.comAlso, please have her create a better background photo for you! She has LOTS of stock images!
Headline (words under your name) â this needs work and Iâd like to you fill this out and add it to that location:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? âEXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____ââMSG Me!
Summary:(examples below)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/You’ve got some great info, but I would like you to organize it a bit (refer to the examples).
Outline of summary you can follow and fill in:
Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important. How about you list 3 questions your clients struggle with. What are their pain points? âTired of _____â âWant _______ but CANT?â âAre you ______?â
THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
2 sentences how are you different than your competitorsWho you like to work with
Then add a call to action with your contact info:
If youâre wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if weâre a good fit!
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I’ve taken your suggestions, but ended up changing my approach and most of the profile… there was no way to organize the information provided. My problem was that I had initially written a 6,000 character profile BEFORE I was aware of the 2,000 limit. After cutting and deleting, yes, it appears it was a bit choppy. I decided it would be best to follow your lead and FOCUS on a few problems target audience face. I believe I’ve now done this.
Will you review this and share your thoughts? https://www.linkedin.com/in/diantaylor1/
The profile pic and request for a better background pic were sent to Lindsey.
Thanks!
Dian
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Hi @dian-taylor, nice job improving. Few things:
Please don’t capitalize the majority of your summary as it’s very hard to want to read.
Your headline does not really make sense. How about this —>
Want To Find The PERFECT Home WITHOUT Having To Settle? âExpert Realtor Helping Clients In ArizonaââMSG Me!
The summary is really loud and not cohesive. Please make sure to proofread because there are lots of grammar mistakes.
If you need to copy the outline of this profile and add your own information, do so:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Your pain point questions are okay but again, please proofread. Try to add a bit more variety to the pain point questions. What else are they concerned about??
Then, tell them you know exactly how you can help and what you do.
Mention WHO you work with.
HOW you serve your clients.
Great call to action!
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