2 years, 11 months ago-
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Hello! Here is my first draft of updating my profile! Look forward to feedback!!
https://www.linkedin.com/in/michelle-varner-moore/
Thank you!!
Michelle
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Hey there @michelle-moore! Great job submitting your profile for review – below are my comments:
FANTASTIC profile photo and background/banner image! It’s extremely inviting and professional!
Headline (words under name):
I do like your headline BUT based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
About Section:
Right now, your About section is not reading like a sales letter – it has awesome information but with the chunky paragraphs, it’s making me not want to read what you’re writing because i’m not sure who you’re talking to.
When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.
Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized!
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Try to make it less resume/you centered and more THEM. HOW do you help clients, WHO do you like working with, WHY should they pick you?
Call to action at the end needs to be more alpha:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂
Great work overall!
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