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[Elle Ebizadeh]

@negeen-dargahi  @kent-littlejohn

I just completed my LinkedIn profile. Could I please get your feedback.

Thank you

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elle-elham-ebizadeh-b238854/

[n d]

Hi  @elle-ebiza! Nice job taking action on your profile! Few things:

Beautiful profile photo!

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

This is the best piece of ‘real estate’ on your LinkedIn profile. Let’s really make it POP. How about something like this…

Want ________ WITHOUT _____?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞ Message Me!

Summary:

Please do not write in THIRD person. Write in 2nd person!

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

You also need more information in your summary.

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

Also, your paragraph is a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

I know you’re not a broker but just look at the way it’s formatted.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you. It’s nice to educate them but not throughout the entire profile.

Call To Action:

You need one!

“If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂

[Elle Ebizadeh]

Hi Negeen,

I am not familiar in how to add a background picture that Lindsey provided – also I added a pdf file to my profile of what we do (please check and let me know what you think).  I am an agent / commercial real estate but my concentration is Mulitfamily  / Apartment buildings.

Thank you in advance for your help.

Elle

 

[n d]

Hi @elle-ebiza! No problem.

If you have the image that Lindsey made you and need to add it, here’s how:

Step 1: Log into LinkedIn.
Step 2: Navigate to your profile.
Step 3: Click edit by clicking on the PEN icon on the right side of your name.
Step 4: Click the edit background option. (pen icon)
Step 5: Choose a background provided by LinkedIn or upload your own. NOTE: Use a JPG, PNG, or GIF under 4MB in size. …
Step 6: Hit save.

Elle, for your PDF file of what you do, that is not necessary. Please ADD your content from your Profile Accelerator into the SUMMARY of your profile. To do that, click on the pencil icon next to your name and a pop up window will appear.

Please let me know if you’re confused and I’d be happy to help!

[Elle Ebizadeh]

Hi Negeen,

Please check my profile – I added background picture etc.

Thank you so much.

Elle

[n d]

Hi @elle-ebiza! For some reason, it’s not letting me access your LinkedIn profile.

It’s saying the page is unavailable.

Can you make sure to send me a new link to your profile (click on Tutorials on the left side of the screen in app.hecp.com and watch the first video on how to do that)

Also double check that your profile privacy settings are set to public.

Tag me when you do this so I can provide feedback!

 

[Elle Ebizadeh]

Here you go

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elle-ebizadeh-b238854/

[Elle Ebizadeh]

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elle-ebizadeh-b238854/

[n d]

Hi @elle-ebiza – this looks so much better!!

Headline:

I’d like you to instead fill this out. What you have, after consideration, is not the best.

Want ________ WITHOUT _____?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞ Message Me!

Summary:

Remember to lead your readers through your sales letter.

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

Like the ones from your headline!!

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

Please copy the outline of the profile below. THEN add YOUR information to it. This should really help.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you. It’s nice to educate them but not throughout the entire profile.

Call To Action:

What you have is not great.

How about:

If you are READY to enhance your investing strategy for maximum profit… message me here on LinkedIn TODAY to see if we’re a good fit!

 

 

[Elle Ebizadeh]

@negeen-dargahi  @kent-littlejohn

N

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elle-ebizadeh-b238854/

 

[Elle Ebizadeh]

Negeen,

Did you get my profile updates?

 

 

[n d]

Yes, @elle-ebiza! LOOKS GREAT!

 

[Elle Ebizadeh]

Am I done with my profile?

[n d]

@elle-ebiza YES 🙂 you can move forward

 

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